Pleasure Zone
This is the 6th in the series of Fluck Tuesdays.
Inspired by Oliver Fluck’s “Pleasure Zone.”
Photo courtesy of Oliver Fluck and sincere gratitude for the collaboration which resulted in eight very unique fiction pieces. These were the initial stories. Then I continued to create 23 more and that is how Collection of Auguries came to be. Grateful for the synchronicity which brought us together so these stories could be told with the help of a lens.
“What does moral mean?” Zolar asked enthusiastically.
A mother who is firmly living in fearful “state” of self-absorption after the breakdown of her marriage. Prepossessing, reprehensible, but ultimately incomprehensible to her.
Wonderful writing that captured and kept my attention throughout. Last paragraph was just perfect.
I really liked this story. Being from Kansas and having driven across the state several times, you hooked me with your imagery and the ‘land of awes’ line. Yes, of course everyone knows Missouri = Misery. Great job and glad I read it. Looking forward to more.
Beautiful piece, Annie. Identifiable on so many levels, and the characters are written so well. *Applause* I agree with the previous poster. The last paragraph was indeed perfect.
We recently discussed your fear of the inability to write fiction. After reading this, I find your fears unfounded and without merit.
Bravo!
This piece reminds me of “The Last Samurai” by Helen DeWitt. It’s one of most brilliant pieces of literature that I have ever read and was DeWitt’s first outing.
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@John – I had never heard of this author or the book.I want to check it out now! 🙂 Thank you so much for your words. It means a lot.
Thank you all for reading and sharing your thoughts.
Annie, you capture Zolar well. I’ve known children like that. This is such a sad piece… the pushme/pullme of divorce and the child left inbetween.
Of course, I saw a very sad play yesterday and so I may be seeing everything through sad-tinged glasses today.
I see what you mean, this is different. This piece is a classical narrative, whereas the storyarms piece feels more like a challenging style exercise. But both are well executed and character driven. I like how in both pieces your characters appear fleshed out from the first lines. You set the atmosphere very well. I also like how the scene is not seen from just one of the characters’ point of view but alternate between how they each feel and think. Here – as with the storyarm story – the flow is very natural and rhythmic. It’s a really strong point of your writing, you shouldn’t hesitate to emphasise it.
Do you have a thing for names starting with ‘Z’? Just asking because I always have to watch myself or I’d name all my characters with names starting with ‘S’. I have no idea why.